Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.
It has become apparent in recent years, that there
are
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is
stagerring
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staggering
difference
in the opportunities of developed Fix the agreement mistake
differences
countries
and countries
that still
in the ongoing developing.Add a missing verb
are still
Therefore
, developed countries
decided to make some financial support due to avoid imbalance in the world
. There are the people who state that this
do
not solve the issue of poverty,whereas others are ardent supporters of the position that protects the idea that it is the only way to overcome Change the verb form
does
the
poverty. Correct article usage
apply
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world leading
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world-leading
countries
should start
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tostart
the
other ways of Correct article usage
apply
hepling
the poorer Correct your spelling
helping
countries
. This
essay will discuss about
the new type of investments that can be made in the near future by developed Remove the preposition
apply
countries
.
Although
,
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the
financial help can maintain the balance in the Correct article usage
apply
world
, countries
that improved their conditions in all fields, might start to create the
new enterprises in the Correct article usage
apply
second
world
countries
. Modern factories that was
opened by foreign Change the verb form
were
countries
due to support undeveloped ones, will create new workplaces, and increase engagement
of citizens Correct article usage
the engagement
to
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in
the
economics. Top Correct article usage
apply
countries
will enhance their impact around the world
by improving their transnational corporations, while countries
in the developing phase will increase their income taxes, therefore
campaign
will be beneficial to both sides. Correct article usage
the campaign
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, Chinese company CNPC group made huge investments into oil
field in Add an article
an oil
Kazakshtan
which provided a lot of locals with the job and become Correct your spelling
Kazakhstan
a
one of the reasons of dramatical increase of economics there.
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apply
Nonetheles
, there are other Correct your spelling
Nonetheless
viewpoint
, that protects the idea of continuing financial support. Change the wording
viewpoints
Foremost
reason for Add an article
The foremost
this
is the fact second
world
countries
should make their own way of improving. Government
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The government
oficcial
of Correct your spelling
official
officials
this
group should learn to make the right decisions, and solving Add an article
the problem
a problem
problem
. The citizens have the right to choose where they can use the investments that Fix the agreement mistake
problems
was
made recently by supporters.
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world leading
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world-leading
countries
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made recently can be solved by using Change the verb form
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