Many people are afraid to leave their home because of crime.Some believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime.While others feel that little action can be done to stop crime.What is your view ?

There has been a colossal upsurge in the number of people who are scared to go out in
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society owing to the fear of criminal activity.
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a plethora of individuals opine that limited actions can be taken to end crime, I believe that there are a lot more to be done to put violence to an end. There
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a myriad of arguments in
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of my stance, the most preponderant
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of the existing laws. Despite the fact that we have a
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set of law and order, often there are
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that help the criminals. The preexisting rules need to be enforced which not only ensures timely actions
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taken
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but
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scares people from committing criminal
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. To exemplify, if the punishment for
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picturing of violence is instant and severe, fewer people will capture them and
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man is regulated. Needless to say, enforcing
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could contribute to lessening the occurrence of violent
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In contrast
, a few individuals claim that the existing judicial system is time-consuming.
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issue can be sorted out by commencing
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more courts in district levels and
consequently
the accumulated load of cases can be settled in a
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manner.
Besides
employing more judges and lawyers
also
contribute to the smooth functioning of the judicial system.
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of a crime is immediate and a modest
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, a person will think twice prior to committing a criminal activity.
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justice
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to be tackled efficiently. From what has been discussed above,
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period of time,
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can reduce the rate of crime across the nation
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