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Finally, more and more work has to be done by machines. Do you think the positive effects of this development outweigh the negative effects on individuals and society?

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Nowadays, countless of jobs can be conducted by artificial intelligence; some are changing for the better, whilst, some are not.
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, there are many advantages and disadvantages--politically and economically--completing the task by the
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. For a variety of reason, which will be outlined in the following paragraph, I personally think that the drawbacks of
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 advancement outweigh the benefits.
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 century, artificial intelligence has been developing exponentially:
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 are getting better and smarter. If the machine can complete more work for human
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 as driving or cleaning, human will have more time to spend with their love ones; getting rid of all mundane works and replace it by
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.
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, had the tasks could be done solely by the
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, many people will lose their jobs resulting in a possible major economical
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: similar to the hamburger
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, it will affect every household; creating not only an economical
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, but
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 a political
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 or even uprising around the world.
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, I firmly believe that the drawbacks of
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 development outweigh the benefits. In conclusion, the upside of
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 advancement is the
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 can dispose of boring tasks: improve the well-being of humanity. While, the downside is that may cause huge economical and political
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.
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, in my point of view, the negative impacts on the society outweigh the possitive effect of
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 advancement.
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