Anything that is good for you can also be bad for you if you do it too much. To what extant do you agree with the following statement?

There is an opinion which says that anything
that is
beneficial for you can
also
be unpleasant if you overdo it. I totally agree with
this
phrase because some examples
such
as consuming too much food could lead to obesity or using modern gadgets might damage our health. First of all, many individuals do not realize it, but obesity has become a huge epidemic in
todays
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society. People tend to ignore the growing unhealthy products around them;
instead
of questioning why they are gaining weight so rapidly, they enjoy the unhealthy and unsuitable substances that they are putting in their bodies. Some eat whatever they can find, and since they are in a certain predicament, they have no choice but,
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up doing the same thing to their children.
For example
, my brother used to eat more meals per day because of his ability in
groceries
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grocery
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and cafes. Now he does not understand how to erase
this
terrible habit from his life, but it is too late. Medical help should be provided in
this
situation in order to give my sibling a chance to lose weight and return to a normal lifestyle.
Secondly
, our young generation uses lots of devices in their daily routine
instead
of living
the
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traditional and healthy life.
However
, gadgets are extremely useful nowadays in different parts of our
life’s
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.
Consequently
, they will differ from their parents in the same age because they did not have
ability
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the ability
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to have and operate modern technologies.
For instance
, my cousin has lots of gadgets and spends with them all day.
As a result
, he already has vision problems and a bad level of vitamin D.
To sum up
, these two simple examples show my opinion of using something too much, and I am sure that it always will have awful results for everybody.
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