Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. What do you think is the case? Is this good or a bad thing

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part of our society

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stylish look in their routine life. I consider it one of the most

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unreasonable

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to do as it may affect

people

in various ways. It is true that

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fashionable

wearings look seductive or even captivating, and more

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, they actually are necessary in some situations,

however

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towards it we witness today is a monumental issue of the contemporary world. As it was mentioned, lots of us experience some

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of hesitation or

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confidence

in confidence

in our decisions when it is a brand-new

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just in front of us. The thing is that even though

people

are not in need of additional pair of boots, they tend to spend their

last

savings on something entitled 'modern' and 'fashionable'.

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way,

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the distinction

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of unhealthy demands for fancy clothes may have unknown outcomes. Another thing is that

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industry is used

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its own values and images of beauty which is completely incompatible with real circumstances. Mass

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medias

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and fashion magazines contribute and thrive

such

ideas in

public's

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the public's

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minds and form erroneous conceptions of these terms.

In other words

people

who follow the latest trends of fashion blindly support

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recognition

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of wrong opinions. It might be said that it is not quite a problem ,

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, it can result in

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harassment

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people

or contradictions between those who

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in different

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sides of the argument. To conclude, I personally believe that

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and fancy clothes can be used by

regular

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the regular

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population,

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, today's images of

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situation

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likely to make you deal in absolutes regarding

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case as it is distinct how troublesome fashion can be.

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