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Today the internet has replaced traditional books as a source of information. Discuss the Advantage & Disadvantage.

Traditional texts are replaced by new technology or the
internet
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 as a source of information because the
internet
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 is cheaper and easily available in every place.
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however
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, it affects
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students'
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 concentration on studies.
To begin
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 with, in the Techno world, education is a significant aspect of life.
it
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 helps us to achieve our goals & Dreams. Now, traditional textbooks are being replaced by the
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.
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 is very helpful for children and positive development because it is cheaper than text. There are many
books
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 which are very expensive and poor people cannot afford them.
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, they can easily learn from websites, Learning Applications
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. BAYJU, ELSA, DUOLINGO &many more.
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moreover
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, it is easily available at every place.
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 pupil can learn everything from home.
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, in India,
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of
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covid-19
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 patients, the schools are closed.
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, the teachers teach children through the
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which
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 is
much
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 helpful for
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. The
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also
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 affects pupils in a negative way because when
students
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 learn from the
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, they cannot concentrate on their work properly
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apply
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a
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 to traditional
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apply
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anything
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 to divert the
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 of
students
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 from their studies.
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furthermore
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, some children don't have the skills to use the
internet
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, but they like to study from
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, in Gujarat, most of the undergraduates give preference to
books
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 because they do not need many skills to read them
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 it
also
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 saves their time. And sometimes applications are costly too. In conclusion,
although
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,
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 the
internet
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 is cheaper and beneficial for
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the poor
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 ones it
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requires
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 many skills
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students
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that students
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 cannot
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acquire
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 with
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concentration on it.

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language
Fix big grammar and spelling errors to make your points clear.
structure
Plan the essay well: write an intro, one paragraph on advantages, one on disadvantages, and a short conclusion.
cohesion
Use linking words to connect ideas, like also, but, however, for example, and use pronouns to avoid repeats.
content
Give simple examples that directly match the idea you state.
lexical
Keep words simple and repeat the main point to show you understand the topic.
strength
You show understanding of both sides of the topic.
strength
There are real-life examples used in the essay.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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