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Task 2: Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. Do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #money #computer #technology #functions
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Technology is flourishing by leaps and bounds and
libraries
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 are no exception.Some people believe that public bookhouses are worthless as the presence of the internet subdues their performance. I disagree with
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 viewpoint because the
web
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 has the ability to distract a person and is non-reliable.I will try to elaborate on my views in the following paragraph. 
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 with, the computer offers numerous functions from searching the desired information on the
web
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 to pre-installed games,which may divert a person from their main objective of reading a book leaving them unaware about the knowledge they wanted to gain in the
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 place.
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,the
web
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 has limited reach and may not be available in certain parts of the world where the use of public bookhouses becomes a necessity.
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,in small towns where internet services are not available people rely on public
libraries
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 to broaden their horizons since they have no other option to look after.
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, there is plenty of information available online and some of them are not reliable,
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 books are considered to be a trusted source of information since their content is verified by many publishers before publishing the book or any other content.
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, the internet is available to all and everyone has the right to drop their thoughts without thinking twice and nobody checks the work which they post online.
On the other hand
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,supporters of
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 statement believe that
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libraries
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 require space to adjust the books and the same land can be utilised for other useful buildings. In conclusion, even though
libraries
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 take much space to be maintained one can not completely depend on the
web
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 to gain knowledge since its unreliable and has the power to divert people from their original work.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repositories of books
  • promoting literacy
  • community engagement
  • equal access to information
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
  • personalized assistance
  • educational programs
  • cultural events
  • safe spaces
  • community meetings
  • tactile experience
  • preserving historical documents
  • important cultural repositories
  • fostering a sense of community
  • communal hubs
  • serene and focused environment
  • conducive to study and reflection
  • irreplaceable value
  • distracted environment
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