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Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

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In recent times, in
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people
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work tasks and chores on a daily basis. In fact, many commentators state that they get
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 amount of sleep each
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rest
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time
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. The main problem that can be caused by lack of sleep is unproductivity. To elaborate, individuals need good quality
rest
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 to function the
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day
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,
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, absence of that can impede their ability to concentrate as well as cause tiredness throughout the
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. The
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 issue is the emotional impact that deters
people
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 from making well-thought-of decisions and forming good relationships.
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, one who did not have enough sleep will feel easily irritated and angry for no reason,
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, he tends to act hastily without too much thought into it. Turning to solutions, the most significant one would be
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good management of personal
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, it is integral that
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 do not sacrifice their bedtime for their work and chores and go to bed at the same
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 every
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. Another effective solution,
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, is adding physical activity to daily
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routing
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 as exercise, so that
people
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 can feel tired at the end of the
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 and fall asleep easily.
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, mental exercise should not be ignored as it has tremendous benefits for
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 mind.
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, one can practice meditation or yoga to find
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peace of mind and calamity which promotes better sleep. To conclude, in
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 modern
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, it is hard to sleep well with accumulated stress and daily tasks. Inadequacy of
rest
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time
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 can cause inefficiency at work and emotional issues
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 as anger and irritation.
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, the countermeasures to achieve better quality
rest
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 include better
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 management, physical exercises and
tranquility
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 practices.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Insomnia
  • Sleep deprivation
  • Sleep disorders
  • Sleep quality
  • Fatigue
  • Exhaustion
  • Restless
  • Restorative sleep
  • REM sleep
  • Circadian rhythm
  • Sleep hygiene
  • Napping
  • Sleep duration
  • Melatonin
  • Sleep-inducing
  • Drowsiness
  • Sleep disturbances
  • Obstructive sleep apnea
  • Snoring
  • Sleepwalking
  • Sleep talking
  • Shift work
  • Sleeping pills
  • Sleep aid
  • Relaxation techniques
  • Meditation
  • Deep breathing
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