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The activity I always do is listening to music. I usually listen to music in my free time, but sometimes

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The activity I always do is listening to
music
. I usually listen to
music
 in my free time, but sometimes I use it when I study or do my homework because it helps (to) reach me's full potential to thinking about
this
. I spent a lot of time doing
this
 job, which makes me relax and motivated after doing something hectic or stressful. I usually listen to
music
 with my best friends, my family, and my lover. The kind of
music
 I always listen to as a rule like US UK, pop
music
, ... In short, I think I'm very happy and comfortable when listening to
music
 because it makes me patient to do everything I want even though it is harder than ever.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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