Some people argue that technological innovations, such as mobile phone, are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

While some
people
consider that technological innovation has changed the way
people
were interacting early because of its
advance
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features.
This
essay will highlight the reasons for fewer physical
interaction
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.
Moreover
, I completely
argee
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agree
with the above statement that advancement in
the
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technology has changed the aspect of society in many ways. On the one hand,
a
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significant numbers of
people
assume that with the
upgradation
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up gradation
up-gradation
in the
technology
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technological
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innovations
such
as
moblie
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mobile
phone has made
people
less social.
In addition
, its
enlarge
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features have given the option to
people
to see each other without being met.
Vedio
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Video
calling is one of its examples.
Moreover
,
people
considered
its
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time-saving compared to meeting in-personal;
therefore
,
physcial
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physical
interaction among
commuinty
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community
is decreasing
day
on
day
. Another point to
be consider
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the reason for
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popularity
populaity
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the populaity
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of mobile phones
are
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its numerous advantages, as it has become a source of fun.
Furthermore
, it provides access to
internet
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the internet
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which gives vast options to an individual
such
as access to games, online banking, shopping apps; as well as access to social media platforms like, Instagram, Facebook
are
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among its examples.
Thus
,
becauses
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because
of its ample
of
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features, human beings are becoming less interactive. To conclude, As mobile phones have numerous benefits;
moreover
,
it
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they
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can be considered as a complete
mode
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model
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of entertainment for an individual;
hence
people
do not feel the need of any company and becoming less interactive
day
by
day
.
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