Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Nowadays, the ratio of
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non-communal diseases is increasing faster than ever, and the overall health of the general workers is decreasing. The main cause of the problems
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lack of physical
exercise
and hectic
work
schedules. Exercises, outdoor activities and
balanced
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diet are the solutions to the problem. One of the primary
reason
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for working people not to do
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physical
activites
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activities
activity
is the hectic workload and competitive environment at
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workplaces
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work places
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. Employers are looking for the best performers and
hardworkers
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hard workers
to drive their businesses.
Therefore
employees have to
work
long hours and even though weekends to
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their
work
. It drains their physical and mental conditions.
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, they do not want to do any
exercise
even when they are at home.
In addition
, vast technological improvements
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stolen their free time exchanging with browsing
internet
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and watching TV. They
also
drive to the nearest shop except for the cycling. These trends
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become
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impact
for
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their health unknowingly. To address the problem physical
exersice
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exercise
is a must and it should be
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habit
habbit
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of day to day
routin
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routine
in working people. Employers have to realise that
healthy
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lifestyle of employees
more
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benifited
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benefited
to them in many ways.
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, they can
facilititate
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facilitate
indoor physical activities
such
as
common
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area with small gym
equipments
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or indoor sports like table tennis to keep them active at the workplace. The government should
also
have to place outdoor parks
equiped
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equipped
with exercising machines and
encorage
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encourage
people to use
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.
Finally
, the workers have to follow a
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balance
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diet to
achive
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achieve
better results and
this
may be
benificial
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beneficial
for both
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parties. In conclusion,
exercise
is
mandotary
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mandatory
to
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our health, mental, productivity and life. Workers, government and employers should collaborate to make everyone's lifestyle healthier by adding more time for
exercise
and
also
healthy
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a healthy
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diet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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