Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.
Nowadays, the ratio of
the
non-communal diseases is increasing faster than ever, and the overall health of the general workers is decreasing. The main cause of the problems Correct article usage
apply
are
lack of physical Change the verb form
is
exercise
and hectic work
schedules. Exercises, outdoor activities and balanced
diet are the solutions to the problem.
One of the primary Add an article
a balanced
reason
for working people not to do Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
much
physical Change the quantifier
many
activites
is the hectic workload and competitive environment at Correct your spelling
activities
activity
Correct your spelling
workplaces
work places
. Employers are looking for the best performers and Correct your spelling
workplaces
hardworkers
to drive their businesses. Correct your spelling
hard workers
Therefore
employees have to work
long hours and even though weekends to cover-up
their Correct your spelling
cover up
work
. It drains their physical and mental conditions. Infact
, they do not want to do any Correct your spelling
In fact
exercise
even when they are at home. In addition
, vast technological improvements has
stolen their free time exchanging with browsing Change the verb form
have
internet
and watching TV. They Correct article usage
the internet
also
drive to the nearest shop except for the cycling. These trends has
become Change the verb form
have
major
impact Correct article usage
a major
for
their health unknowingly.
To address the problem physical Change preposition
on
exersice
is a must and it should be Correct your spelling
exercise
Correct your spelling
habit
habbit
of day to day Correct article usage
a habbit
routin
in working people. Employers have to realise that Correct your spelling
routine
healthy
lifestyle of employees Correct article usage
the healthy
more
Add a missing verb
is more
benifited
to them in many ways. Correct your spelling
benefited
In addition
, they can facilititate
indoor physical activities Correct your spelling
facilitate
such
as common
area with small gym Add an article
a common
equipments
or indoor sports like table tennis to keep them active at the workplace. The government should Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
also
have to place outdoor parks equiped
with exercising machines and Correct your spelling
equipped
encorage
people to use Correct your spelling
encourage
it
. Correct pronoun usage
them
Finally
, the workers have to follow a Change the verb form
balanced
balance
diet to Correct your spelling
balanced
achive
better results and Correct your spelling
achieve
this
may be benificial
for both Correct your spelling
beneficial
the
parties.
In conclusion, Correct article usage
apply
exercise
is mandotary
Correct your spelling
mandatory
to
our health, mental, productivity and life. Workers, government and employers should collaborate to make everyone's lifestyle healthier by adding more time for Change preposition
for
exercise
and also
healthy
diet.Add an article
a healthy
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