You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
Students
leave their homes to purchase their higher education and for Use synonyms
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, they get admitted to university. In many regions, Linking Words
students
stayed with their parents during that time. Use synonyms
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students
have to leave their own Use synonyms
city
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purpose. In my way of thinking living in a Linking Words
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which is unknown outweighs the disadvantages.
Living in another Use synonyms
city
without family is quite difficult for any person. There are too many disadvantages to mention. Use synonyms
Firstly
, by eating food from hotels or restaurants Linking Words
students
often suffer from different kinds of health issues. Use synonyms
For instance
. they often suffered from digestive disturbance Linking Words
additionally
they suffered from malnutrition. People Linking Words
then
thought that eating food from restaurants kept them healthy. Linking Words
However
, these foods pose serious health implications. Linking Words
Secondly
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students
often feel homesickness that's why they become unable to concentrate on their studies. Use synonyms
As a result
, they obtained poor marks in the examinations. They often miss important family functions Linking Words
as a consequence
they get detached from their family.
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On the other hand
, living outside favourable places teaches us how to cope with different situations. Linking Words
This
helps us to solve different problems in letter life. Linking Words
Students
who live with family don't get enough opportunities to show their independent existence which makes them feel shy. Living outside the home gives too much freedom to the Use synonyms
students
so they can do what they like. Use synonyms
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independence makes them too creative to do some exceptional work. Linking Words
For instance
, after leaving home Columbus invented the new existence of a place where people can live. Different situations in their study area teach them how to cope with every situation of life which was quite impossible living with family.
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To conclude
, though living outside the home Linking Words
city
has many disadvantages which can hamper Use synonyms
students
' main purpose of living it provides enormous opportunities to show their creativity or skills. Use synonyms
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also
helps them to boost their confidence which helps them to live a life which is peaceful in the future.Linking Words
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You address both advantages and disadvantages of living away from home, showcasing a balanced view on the topic.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.
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