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It is more important for a building to serve a purpose than to look beautiful. Architects shouldn't worry about producing building as a work of art. Do you agree or disagree?

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Architects have resulted to designing
buldings
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buildings
 which are just attractive to the eyes,they need concentrate more on detailed
art work
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.
Buildings
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 are not meeting the desired requirements set aside by the government it is a matter of beauty on the outside .
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 essay will explore the merits and
dimerits
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demerits
 and give a conclusion.
Buildings
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 have become a source of income for the majority of people,construction sites are full of unprofessional people ,what matters most is that the building is done and people can find their way in there ,
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 has resulted in dire consequences,
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example
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buildings
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 that detail has not been a keen factor are not well finished,cheap and poor materials are used ,
eventually
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this same
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this same building
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buildings
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 will collapse and bring about
calamaties
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calamities
 that were not intended another issue the higher the apartment with so many units the
better detailed
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 art is no longer a prerequisite.
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hand
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 houses that have served the detailed part of it are always
eye catching
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,It is necessary to have
buildings
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 that are detailed because
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 not only enhances the culture of the citizens but they are
long lasting
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buildings
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 built with every single detail and
high quality
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 materials
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 making them expensive,
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instance
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 houses or
buildings
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 that were designed in early years of
60s
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 and 70s,take an example with the
buildings
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 in
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kenya
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 and fort
jesus
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,they are not modern but are still in existence whereas the current ones are just collapsing out of nowhere. In
conclusion
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 detailed art is very important and not only is it a sight to behold but enriches the culture of that particular country,
Buildings
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 should be constructed and designed in a way that they
fulfill
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 their desired intentions.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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