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Countries should produce the food that population eats ,and import as littel as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons,examples to your answer.

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Introduction
It is argued that all the territories should only generate the eatables that the inhabitants consume and mitigate the intake of outside
food
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 inside
own
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their own
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 nation.
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disagree
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 with the given statement.I believe that consumption of other countries
foods
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 will aid in acquiring knowledge regarding
varies
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various
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 cultural
cousines
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cousins
 for the
citizens
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 and ameliorate the nation's fiscal status.
Body paragraph 1
To commence with ,in my opinion,
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 of constant intake of own traditional
foods
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, consuming foreign eatables will enable us to learn about the new taste.
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,
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 getting exposed to new dishes, it will
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 succour the culinary specialists to introduce new
foods
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 to the
citizens
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.
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, the
citizens
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' interest
on
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variety
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a variety
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 of
cousines
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cousins
 will embark
major
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a major
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 surge in the
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food related
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food-related
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 job
availibilities
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availabilities
.
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,recently an article has released that after the import of outside
foods
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 in India,majority of the youngling
are
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 confined to learn more about the different cultural
food
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 of the Indian states.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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,the introduction of foreign
foods
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have
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 been portraying
steep
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a steep
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 rise in the country's monetary status.To elaborate,it has been vastly cognizance that the multitudes preference of the other territories eatables have introduced numerous foreign restaurants as well as shops.
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,the inhabitants are not only
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able
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abled
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able
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 to secure a moderate job but
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 the
authories
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authorities
 are
abled
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 to earn excellent cess from these sources which directly expedites the country's economic development.To exemplify,
Indian
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the Indian
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 fiscal department has been
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able
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abled
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able
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 to log almost 40%of the national cash subsidies from these outside eatery shops.
Conclusion
To conclude,I want to reiterate that the introduction of the other nations
food
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 should be continued as it has been ensuing major salutary impacts.To specify,
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 strategy apart from teaching the
citizens
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 about
varies
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various
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 traditional
foods
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,
it
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apply
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also
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 aids in improving the economic condition of the country.

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