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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and societies To what extent do you agree?

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Social networking
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, for ,instance Facebook, are thought by many
people
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 these induce negative
impacts
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 on both individuals and societies,
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, cyberbullying, negative comments, and accusations.
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, social networking
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 have positive
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 greater than what many have been led to believe, the most noteworthy of these being bringing
people
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 close together and marketing
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. To start off, social networking
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 are where
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 can keep in contact with their friends and families,
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, these provide spaces for every kind of
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 as new communities to communicate with the unknown, and clubs to share things, conversations, or their preferences. These can bring
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 from different nations, religions, languages, and locations close together.
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, there is high competition in marketing now, companies spread their kinds of stuff by advertising on social networking
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, there are numerous small businesses grow by selling kinds of stuff on an online,
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 they are only small businesses have
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 by social networking site open an opportunity to able to compete with huge companies.
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, there are many cafés, restaurants, bristles, book stores and resorts where become famous places from promoting on Facebook, Twitter, and Instagram. These can prove that social networking
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 can create ways and opportunities for marketing to societies. To sum up, events, negative
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 occur on social networking
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 as many
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 believe.
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, I believe that these offer positive
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 through the construction of new online communities, communication
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, and marketing
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, the development of law can solve problems on social networking
sites
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