Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with statement ?

Railways
are the lifeline of any nation. In recent times population believe that
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authorities should spend more money on
railways
compare to
road
transport
. I completely agree
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as we need to spend more money on building
railways
compare to
road
transport
. In the below passage
i
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will elucidate the importance of
railways
over
road
transport
. To commence with, rail
transport
is very convenient compared to roads as they provide various facilities like food, water, medical assistance and restrooms, rail
transport
provide convenience and safety to travellers. Rail
travel
causes less pollution as railway lines are built outside of cities which make them more eco friendly.
lastly
, more people can
travel
by
railways
compared to bus or private cars which makes it a more economical or better mode of
transport
.
However
,
Road
transport
causes traffic and create a lot of noise pollution and is not convenient for long-distance
travel
. the capacity of people can
travel
on the
road
is
also
less. ,
,
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lastly
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it is not safe and no medical assistance is available in case of emergency. To Recapitulate, There are clear evidence people prefer
railways
over
road
transport
as they are must convenient, cheaper and safe.considering all above factor authorities should focus more on building
railways
.
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