Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed. However, some people think that zoos are useful for protecting rare animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some individuals consider that
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are not beneficial and must be closed,while others are
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I will discuss both sides along with my opinion which will be highlighted in the forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with,
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who think that
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should be closed reason behind it are considerable.
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, misuse of
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, they use
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for shooting
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and get money from it . Even it is the source of income for few
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, lack of proper diet , they do not provide sufficient diet to all
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which leads to their poor growth and development and
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major cause of death of
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in
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, unnecessary experiments
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on
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in
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with the permission of
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. On the other side and according to my point of view,
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are safe in
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, because they provide protection to
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. Primarily,
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are kept
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under supervision, so that they can be prevented from
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.
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not only protect the
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,
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but
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meet the all needs of
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like proper treatment is given to them in case of sickness. Secondarily,
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animals
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, which are on the verge of extension , special efforts are taken by the
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,so that they can ve saved.
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,
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are not allowed to touch any
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and
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pay charges if they want to visit
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. To conclude,
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zoos
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are cruel for
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some extent;
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, I believe that , they are important to protect the
animals
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that are on the verge of extension.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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