In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, an increasing number of
people
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are suffering from health problems, one of the most common
reason
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for these diseases is eating junk
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.
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, some
people
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believe that government should take some precautions, like imposing a higher tax on
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kind of
food
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. What are the advantages and disadvantages of
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idea? On the one hand, there are a number of arguments against
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statement.
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, some
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do not have enough
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for cooking, they would rather eat fast
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, as it saves
people
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’s money and
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. My mum is one of those
people
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who are busy all day long, so eating
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kind of
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is
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thing for her. The
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reason is the taste. Perhaps it is the greatest advantage, which gives
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emotional pleasure,
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fact and low price
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fast
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the most popular
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in the whole world!
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, there are some drawbacks. We are what we eat, junk
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has nothing in common with healthy
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, which contains a host of vitamins and nutritions. That’s why fast
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causes many health problems like obesity, heart diseases and so on. It is
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why
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choose
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type of
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and it is acceptable to eat some burgers or pizza from
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to
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, but some
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are addicted to
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and do need help. Sometimes it seems like my mum is addicted
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dependence
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affects
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her health and mostly on body shape,
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can cause emotional problems. If
government
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the government
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knows how to deal with
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problem
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a problem
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,
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than
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they should do that, even if it can harm someone else. To sum up, there are both good and bad points of imposing
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tax on fast
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. For someone it is
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, so making
higher
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a higher
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tax on
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kind of
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can make
people
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’s life even more complicated. But there is another side, which needs immediate solutions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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