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Today more people are shopping online than ever before. Why do people choose to shop in this way? Are there disadvantages to shopping online?

#people #shop
Nowadays, purchasing
products
 from the Internet has become a trend and a number of citizens do it.
People
 select
this
 kind of shopping for some reasons,
however
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this
 situation brings some cons that I will explain them. The main reason that nations elect online shopping is time management; my point is in these days, all humans are busier than past they do not have many points, and they are in hurry.
Consequently
, they prefer to choose online shopping to reduce their waste of life rather than browse in the boutiques or window-shopping. The
second
 issue is the variety of goods that the community can buy I mean, the community can select a wide range of equipment from around the world just by their credit card.
For instance
, Amazon is one of the well-known chain
stores
 that have various output and
people
 around the world can purchase their favourite property just by registering on the website and pay the
products
.
As a result
,
people
 prefer to buy online outlets for saving time and choice a variety of
products
.
On the other hand
, buying
products
 from online
stores
 have some drawbacks.
Firstly
, when citizens obtain goods from popular online
stores
 some retail outlets or local markets have to eliminate. Due to, local shops do not make a profit, and they become bankrupt so they remove their business.
Secondly
, when
people
 pick up
products
 from online markets they do not make sure to buy genuine equipment. Despite the fact that paying too much on the original good and do not see it
then
, they receive a fake one.
In addition
, some online boutique has fake accounts maybe they do not exist either but
people
 who order goods and pay the money
also
 never reaches on their crop.
Furthermore
, if
people
 want to use online shops, they should select famous
stores
 and it would be better for them. In summary, many
people
 prefer to purchase their
products
 in online
stores
 because saving term is significant for them .
Although
this
 situation makes some negative aspects, that I mentioned previously.
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