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With access to the internet and social media websites, many children are exposed to a number of dangerous situations. Adults should thus limit access to the internet for their children. Do you agree or disagree?

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Online communications have changed the world completely but I believe that it can be misused and is not completely safe for kids unless they follow safe browsing habits. I agree completely that
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adults should keep a keen eye on the activities of their
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 online. In
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 we will see the negative effects of not monitoring kids and how it affects their future.
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, many adolescents are getting addicted to the various platforms we have
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 the web. With young people having access to smartphones and being connected to the web, access to a range of content is available to them. There are some videos that show gory actions.
For example
, there are games these days that promote violence. Recently I heard about a kid of
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 trying to perform moves from his game on
one
 of his classmates.
This
 lead to the fellow student having a broken arm.
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 of online bullying. The younger generation may not be prepared mentally to handle the different types of conversations online. Making fun of
one
's appearance, skin colour, mannerisms are rampant.
Moreover
, these talks include racists undertones and coarse language. These affect the mental
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 of youth.
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, I heard about
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 India, a guy committed suicide because
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 of their friends made fun of him
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 of the social media sites. In conclusion,
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adults should control what their kids do while they go online as there are dire consequences including physical and mental harm
otherwise
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dangerous situations
  • limit access to the internet
  • inappropriate content
  • online predators
  • physical and mental health
  • monitoring and guiding
  • online safety
  • school curriculum
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