With access to the internet and social media websites, many children are exposed to a number of dangerous situations. Adults should thus limit access to the internet for their children. Do you agree or disagree?

Online communications have changed the world completely but I believe that it can be misused and is not completely safe for kids unless they follow safe browsing habits. I agree completely that
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adults should keep a keen eye on the activities of their
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we will see the negative effects of not monitoring kids and how it affects their future.
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, many adolescents are getting addicted to the various platforms we have
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the web. With young people having access to smartphones and being connected to the web, access to a range of content is available to them. There are some videos that show gory actions.
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, there are games these days that promote violence. Recently I heard about a kid of
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trying to perform moves from his game on
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of his classmates.
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of online bullying. The younger generation may not be prepared mentally to handle the different types of conversations online. Making fun of
one
's appearance, skin colour, mannerisms are rampant.
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, these talks include racists undertones and coarse language. These affect the mental
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of youth.
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India, a guy committed suicide because
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of their friends made fun of him
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adults should control what their kids do while they go online as there are dire consequences including physical and mental harm
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