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People are having more free time and more money available to spend on leisure events. A considerable amount of capital is being spent by humans in participating in cultural or sports activities. This essay will discuss the reasons why this is an excellent way to spent money in order to grow as an individual in various areas of life such as psychological health and emotional intelligence.

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 are having more free time and more money available to spend on leisure events. A considerable amount of capital is being spent by humans in participating in cultural or sports activities.
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 essay will discuss the reasons why
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 is an excellent way to spent money in order to grow as an individual in various areas of life
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 as psychological health and emotional intelligence.
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 interest in culture or sports has grown and it has become an important part of their weekly schedule because they have noticed a beneficial outcome in doing so. To put it
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, it is becoming a trend as a variety of perks are arising to achieve an expanded knowledge about history or different cultures of a specific country.
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 is illustrated in an article of The Joy-CULT magazine in June 2018, when it was exposed to the rising level of IQ in
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 who spent money in doing
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 activities
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 to those who did not.
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, finding time for
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 leisure activities is an excellent way to gain benefit even in the social aspect,
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 is believed that many
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 find it easier to create a network and build a stronger friendship with
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 sharing the same interest.
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, it is pleasant to find other human beings with similarities as yours that fully understand what you do.
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, my cousin found his love in a museum,
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 he believes it was the best decision to spend those 10 euros to get in the Louvre. To conclude, despite the economical aspect, I agree that
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 need to do whatever makes them reap the benefit, either in the intellectual or emotional aspect.

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