Some people think the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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imprisonment is one of the best
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, some of them think about various better alternative methods to reduce offends .There are both views of
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essay. On the one hand , most people think that the offenders must be kept in prisons for
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imprisonment and they will not commit offends again and again as they can be known about the adverse consequences of reoffends .
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society again .
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who make heinous
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must be kept behind the walls for
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, some people believe in alternative ways for reducing
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crime
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rate , as in traditional jails
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learn more about
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leave prison to commit even more
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imprisonment act as a university of
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for offenders.
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should adopt other methods
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to pickpockets and shoplifters because it is well-known fact that poverty, illiteracy and unemployment are
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causes of illegal activities.
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other alternatives rather than long prison sentences for all culprits. To be concluded, in my
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, multitudes who commit heinous actions,
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as serial killers, rapists as well as murderers
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jails .
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government should adopt other better ways for small scale law brokers in order to decline critical crises.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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