Nowadays more and more older people who are looking for work have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problem does this cause? What are the possible solutions?

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Plenty of
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who are in their middles ages have to be suffered a lot because of the competition with teenagers when applying for
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similar types of jobs. Majorly, the modern technology is easily accessing by young
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to find a suitable employer, better over the adults, and they are really involving with the mental stresses more, is a cause to become less efficient on seeking a good income. I will explain the issues in detail, that I have mentioned, and
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give suitable solutions for each in the upcoming paragraphs. In
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the entire society is going in parallel with the technology, usage of laptops,
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, tablets, etc.,
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the new generation is empowered on that, because of the frequent usage compared to the elderly
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who are used to be with their traditional mindsets.
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, 13 years old boy or girl can use a
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and teach a suitable way of finding a job vacancy on the internet, on the websites
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top jobs
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observer jobs
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which is some kind of miracle to them. As a solution, workshops related to
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smart devices can be introduced
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adulterly
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by the government which will enhance the capabilities of the old generations in the nation.
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, nowadays the whole tension is taken by the farther in many households, where their young children can be freely concentrated on what they were doing, schooling, exams or some kind of an
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employment
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, due to the vast fondness of the
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to their babies (
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seen as babies by their
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, in most of the times), they never want to take the responsibility, but be in a
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. To
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,
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should change their mindsets to be toughed to their boy or girl, but not showing them
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comfort-zone,
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only they will realize the hardness of
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family life.
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, the stress will be distributed among the family and it will
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the access for the older
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on
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enriching the knowledge of elderly
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with
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today's
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technology as well as find a suitable way to ease their tension on families will be an effective solution for the drawback, older
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meet a huge rat race in order to find a particular job.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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