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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree whit this statement?

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It is undeniable that participating
voluntary
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in voluntary
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activities
,
such
 as working for a charity and society improving, can create many advantages for many pupils.
This
 is the reason some persons think that
community
 service without paying should be mandatory for
students
 in high
school
. From my point of view, I agree with
this
 viewpoint for many reasons which will be outlined in the detail in the following paragraph. On the on hand, participating in unpaid
community
services
 of high
school
 sometimes is a waste of time for many
students
 because they should be learned only what they want to study.
For example
, someone has interested in art, they can take an art class to replace voluntary
activities
 to create artwork for making their portfolio.
On the other hand
, these voluntary
services
 can
also
 create a lot of benefits for
students
 as well.
For instance
, they can learn many
skills
, like teamwork
skills
, communication
skills
, problem-solving
skills
 and time management
skills
 when they work with others from different backgrounds.
Additionally
, they will gain more experience and responsibility which have
useful
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 for their future, and working on a charity service not only makes them more
awareness
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aware
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 for neighbourhood and society
,
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 but
also
 helps them to increase self-confidence.
Furthermore
, the pupils who graduated with these
activities
 tend to have a better opportunity in applying for university and career rather than
students
 who do not have voluntary
services
 in their resume, in my opinion. In conclusion, I strongly agree with
this
 statement because the pupils can make a lot of positive impacts
for
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 participating
unpaid
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in unpaid
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community
 service in high
school
, and they can use these benefits to make a career path or a university path in their future.
Therefore
, it is recommended that parents and teachers should support and encourage their children to join some
community
services
 in their
school
, and the
students
 should choose these
activities
 by themself.
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