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In many countries, people now wear Western clothes (suits, jeans) rather than traditional clothing. Why? Is this a positive or negative development?

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In recent days ,there is conflicts regarding while choosing outfits.some opine majority of
people
 prefer would rather western
clothes
 than traditional
clothes
.In
this
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 I will explain the reasons behinds
this
 scenario and
this
 gives advantages or disadvantages to society.
To begin
 with,due to various reasons
people
 prefer to use western
dresses
.
Firstly
 ,western
dresses
 ,which is more convenient to use and
wide
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 variety of kinds of wester outfits are available in the market at the cheapest rate.For evidence,traditional
clothes
 are Very difficult to wear as well as maintaining
also
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 to
people
 so that
people
 are more comfortable to a western outfit while doing activities
such
 as during working time,exercise and all.
secondly
,globalization, which enables to enhance the usage of modern outfits because that wide variety of
dresses
 are easily available to the public;
moreover
people
 are influenced by watching videos and TV shows. The invention of modern clothing effect varies positively the society.individuals like to imitate others trends and culture if it affects positively,it will beneficial for the government
also
.usage of western
clothes
 assist to enhance the economy of society. To conclude,western dress styles are very useful for air daily life.
However
,
people
 preserve traditional
dresses
 occasionally,which represent a country's culture and traditions.
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  • Globalization
  • Influence
  • Perception
  • Modern
  • Trendy
  • Practicality
  • Comfort
  • Professionalism
  • Integration
  • Global economy
  • Cultural identity
  • Appreciation
  • Preservation
  • Individual expression
  • Freedom of choice
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