Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed

The choice of pursuing a
field
of
study
is not a trivial one. In fact, it is not uncommon for
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students
to
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their choice of
study
. The prompt
suggest
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that
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educational institutions should dissuade
students
from pursuing fields of
study
in which they are unlikely to succeed. In my opinion, I disagree with the suggestion as no one can predict the future of any
student
for three reasons.
To begin
, educational institutions should not dissuade
students
from pursuing their respective
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fields
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field
as they cannot predict the future.
For instance
, if a
student
wants to become an engineer, but lacks mathematical or analytical knowledge. Rather than discouraging and demotivating, the
student
should be given
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tools
and knowledge to enhance his/her skills. By providing them with the best academic
tools
, you never know when they start finding subjects like mathematics, physics or anything related to engineering interesting. The above example illustrates that
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educational
institutes
have no right
in dissuading
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students
to take
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any
field
of
study
. On
contrary
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, they should be providing the best available academic
tools
to the
students
and help them gain interest in their respective
field
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fields
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.
Further
, it is not relevant to judge the person on two factors
such
as fame and money, to decide if the person is successful or not.
For instance
, if a
student
who
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likes mathematics but is not that talented in that
field
. No one can stop him from becoming a mathematics teacher in an elementary school. For him, he is successful as he is doing what he loves.
Therefore
, the definition of success is different for everyone and it cannot be judged by any factors.
Finally
, it is the responsibility of
students
to choose
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field
of
study
. No educational
institutes
have the right to dissuade
students
.
However
,
institutes
have the responsibility to help the
students
in developing interest and help them
finding
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what they love.
Institutes
should expand their libraries with more resources which would encourage the
students
to find what they really like.
To conclude
, no educational institute can predict the future of the
students
. It is the responsibility of the
students
to pursue their
field
of
study
,
institutes
should only encourage and motivate them by providing the necessary academic
tools
and help them
finding
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a
field
which they like. The definition of success is different for everyone, so it can not be judged by only two factors
like
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fame and money.
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