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Nowadays, goverments are trying to encourage people to use buses or subways for their daily travel. What are the advantages of forms of public transport like these?

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The use of private vehicles has become popular. People have money commuting options to work including public
transport
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.Let’s see what
it’s
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its
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advantage
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.
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 The reality is that public transportation has many benefits.
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, I will write about personal
interest
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.Using buses, trains,
bicycle
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,etc….save us some money.
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, we driving a private car or motorbike,we have to pay for not only the cost of petrol but
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mainternance
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maintenance
 fee or the purchase price of an expensive car or motorcycle.Buses,trams….are for everyone with the lowest income.
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, public
transport
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 help
we
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 limit the impact of outside weather
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 as rain,sun,wind when we go
along
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 way.
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, when we sit on the
the
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transport
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 we will have more time to enjoy life(chatting,reading, listening to music…).
Beside
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, public
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 bringing many benefits not only to individuals but
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 to society.
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, they reduce traffic jams, reduce fuel consumption from users.
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 environmental pollution by reducing emissions from personal motor vehicles.And thanks to the elements on public
transport
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 that avoid causing the greenhouse effect. In summary, public
transport
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 will be able to help us
many
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 things and it will make our life better, avoid traffic jams,pollution and it helps us to see the sky better. In the future, I hope
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 means of transportation will become a reality.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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