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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally Discuss both side by giving reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In these modern days, global warming is a hot issue to be discussed. It is generally claimed that
this
 difficulty is world-scale responsibility and some of them feel that
climate
change
 are duties for each nation all around the world.
This
 essay will discuss those opinions which
is
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 believed by some
people
. There is an opinion that
this
 issue is our
duties
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 as
people
 who
life
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 on
this
 earth because working in a big portion will give
direct
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 impact. If all
country
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countries
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have
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same
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 vision to overcome
climate
change
, the impact
from
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this
 goal will be seen clearly and in a short time. World Wide Life has
initiate
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 a program called Earth Hour which the main purpose
from
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this
activities
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 is to solve
environmental
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 matter by switching off all unnecessary electrical devices for one hour.
This
 event is held
annual
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 to remind
people
 all around the world about global warming.
This
 global action is one of the best
way
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 to fix
climate
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 crisis.
On the other hand
, some societies assume
this
 global heating must be handle by their own
country
 because it is
the
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 effective way to face
this
 problem Each region
have
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 their own solution which might be different from each
country
.
Although
 the main target is similar for every
country
, some
state
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states
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 have
a
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special
condition
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conditions
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.
As a
result
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 they must have their own strategy to handle
this
 situation. In Indonesia,
for instance
, the government has a regulation that
people
 should use
a
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 electric car for their private vehicle.
However
,
this
 solution is not suitable
to
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the country
a country
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country
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countries
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 with less personal transportation. For
this
 reason, it is more appropriate to handle
climate
change
 by themselves To conclude , many
people
 argue about the solution to solve
climate
change
 which some of them think that
this
 issue could be handle
in
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 a global scale to achieve direct impact but the others feel that
climate
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the climate
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 crisis must be overcome by each
country
 because
their
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 unique condition.
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