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These days Internet has brought a revolution in the world. what are the advantages and disadvantages of internet?

#internet #revolution #world
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internet
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 takes over the world.
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are
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 much connected to the technology so
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 plays a
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Internet
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 allows people to explore the world,
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 their problems and
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internet
ineternet
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 helps in gaining knowledge.
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 provides
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information
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 about everything so
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internet
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 plays a major role in
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 era. Coming through
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positives
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 helps one to gather required
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 share known
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 helps the students to collect the
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ideas
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of
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 making a project.Through
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internet
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 we can
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 lifestyle and way of living.
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 is much useful to everyone to explore,gain new
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 helps for
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. Every good has some bad.
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Internet
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 many disadvantages like it kills new
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 and thinking ability means if get addicted to it we lack
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in thinking
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for
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 example,if a student doing a project and he copies
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 from
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internet
 he surely gets good grades but zero knowledge and he has no
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.Everything gets easy
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internet
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 so people stop working hard to
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achieve
 things. so concluding
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 can be a revolution in the world but everyone should understand that
internet
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give
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 much bad impact to the society.
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internet
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 makes people lazy and
destroy
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 their thinking ability.So one can use
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internet
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 but only to some
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extent
extinct
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolution
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • easy access
  • information
  • communication
  • online shopping
  • banking
  • entertainment
  • multimedia
  • online learning
  • education
  • global connectivity
  • addiction
  • time-wasting
  • privacy
  • security concerns
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • health issues
  • digital divide
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