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In recent years some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the countryside. This situation may bring some problems for the country as whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced?

In many countries, development in
cities
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 has been
occuring
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occurring
in
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much
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 faster pace than in rural
areas
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. Thereupon, life in urban
areas
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 has improved significantly, whereas
citizens
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 in the countryside are still deprived of many new facilities. Undoubtedly, there will be issues arising from
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 gap.
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 problems and suggests remedies to tackle them. One of the major problems that a country might face is
wider
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 gap between the rich and the poor. Societal injustice can cause disharmony, and national unity could be sabotaged.
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, in India, farmers
union
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unions
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 hold strikes to
demostrate
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demonstrate
 their frustration with
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a low
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 standard of living, while
citizens
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 in big
cities
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 enjoy higher buying power than ever before. Another possible problem is a massive wave of migration from rural to urban
areas
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. If people living in villages struggle to make ends meet, they will move to big
cities
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 with the hope of earning a better income.
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 imposes grave challenges in many aspects,
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 as agriculture, labour market, and population density. Governments can take necessary steps to mitigate the gap in rural and urban
areas
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.
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 and foremost,
budget
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the budget
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 allocation should be amended
accordingly
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. Most budget plannings are designed based on population density, while
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 mindset should be adjusted based on the significance and potentials of the area. To illustrate, many villages have
small
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population
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populations
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 because most of the land is used for farming. States can allocate budgets to assist these rural
citizens
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 in developing for the future with solar panels, or up-to-date agricultural technology.
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, educational programs in business marketing could be provided to
citizens
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 of rural
areas
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 to help them adjust to new realities of the business world;
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, increasing their chances of earning income from where they live without the need to migrate. To summarize, it is evident that
instrastrutural
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infrastructural
 developments are happening with a much more rapid speed in
cities
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 as compared to rural
areas
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.
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, there could be social and economical issues
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 governments need to address via budgeting and direct engagement.

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