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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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In today's era of computers and the internet ,the shopping habit of
people
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 are changing rapidly and now more and more
people
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 prefer online shopping ,
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 of going in person.Some
people
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 are concerned that
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 development will wipe out all shops in town and cities,I personally do not agree with
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 statement and provide
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 essay. life of hurry and bustle and constant demand from job and society leaves very little time for shopping and other personal activities ,so individuals nowadays try to use their time during breaks and sometimes during travel to job or home for finishing with their shopping using online platforms to order and get delivered at home or curbside pick up. So small shops in
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 places keep losing their customers to those big online platforms and it is getting hard for them to survive in competition and eventually go out of business. On the other ,hand those online gadgets have more wide range of selection from global brands and materials which attract consumers to shop online,those big giants buy products in large quantities so their costing will be more economical which adds more struggle for those small traders in small places.For benefit of small ,communities government should come up with solutions like an equal wholesale price for everyone and more taxes for those big companies and subsidies for small scale traders. In my opinion with government support and encouragement of
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 for local shopping and supporting local products will keep small shops in cities and towns forever.
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