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Some people think that sport teaches children how to compete, while other believe that children learn teamwork. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Sports
 remains one of the famous activities among
children
 from the ancient era to modern time , parents and teachers all the time encourage them to take part in different types of
games
 as either to learn
teamwork
 or the spirit of competition and they weigh
this
 more or less in terms of achievement by
children
 but I am of opinion that they learn both the
qualities
 from sporting events simultaneously and going to elaborate in
this
 essay.
Sports
 are always good for mental ,physical health as well as the overall development of
children
 because taking part in
such
 activities teach them vital
qualities
 for lifelike
team
 spirit ,goal achievement and moral strength but some are dividing
sports
 as a tool of gaining only individual
qualities
. Followers of group
games
 like football ,volleyball or soccer are viewing the
games
 as a medium of learning high-quality
teamwork
 and depending on the
team
's success or failure they count on, players as the good
team
 player means they have learned the good value of
teamwork
,and if failure
then
 the opposite is true.
On the other hand
 in individual as well as in a
team
 ,
games
 all players need to learn the spirit of competition
besides
teamwork
 as in final say only the one or the other will not give them success but a combination of both will make it sure for the duo.In short competitive
games
 teaching all the aspects of life for success in
sports
 as well as in life as a whole. In final say ,I would like to go for both the above-mentioned life skills ,which
children
 learn from the
sports
 activities and one should encourage them to take part in all types of
games
 without considering what
qualities
 they will learn more or less but, for sure they will learn well.
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