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many people use distance-learning programs to study at home, but some think that it cannot bring the same benefits of attending school, college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There are a lot of people who advocate for online learning with the aid of several programs. Others
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 claim the opposite, stating that it
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 no means brings out the same benefits as attending in-person schools or tertiary institutions. In my perspective ,
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 believe that e-learning’s drawbacks outweigh its benefits. In the
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 place, the academic performance of the
students
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 is enormously impacted as there are comprehensive changes made to the academic delivery setting.
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, there exist a lot of inconveniences and distractions
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 as technical issues,
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 due to notifications on the mobile phone which can hinder the focus of
students
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. As an example,
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research conducted by
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,
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suggest that
students
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 participate less in lectures online than
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 mode of study. What is more it irrefutably
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 augments physical and mental woes
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 as
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posture
sydronme
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syndrome
 , eye strain causing mental stress for the student. Overall the online learning leads to vexation for
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.
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, e-learning has
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 edge over other modes of learning. It not only is
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 in saving the time spent of travelling to school but
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flexible
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 , Havard and Yale are offering online courses to student’s
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 are adaptable to different
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 if amid the pandemic
students
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 decide to go to their home country. All things considered, e-learning is still far off from getting any closer to conventional learning. In my
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 I
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do not
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 support online learning and could rather prefer
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in person
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 to institutions to get the most of academics.

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