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It has recently been announced that a new high school may be built in your community. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details in your answer.

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In modern society ,all the time a new
development
 is going on like developing new amenities ,schools or other facilities,from
such
 facilities some comes as a boon for local people and the other are , as the worst headache for neighbourhood citizens, I would like to oppose planned
development
 of the new
school
 in our community and will reason for my action in
this
 essay. As new high
school
 brings with it the number of nuisance with it like ,increased traffic during
school
 drop-off and pick up times,parking issues due to excessive requirement of parking, fights between students and increased criminal activities due to involvement of drug pedlers and rascals,so with all
this
 negative thing which are coming with the
school
 make
school
 as non welcomed
development
 in the locality. supporters of a new high
school
 are considering it as easy for children to attend high
school
 as they do not need to travel every day for
school
, rise in property value as the availability of
school
 in the area adds up to
this
, business from students and
school
 staff promotes business to local stores and traders. In the
end
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 considering the pros and cons of high
school
 which it brings with it and the negative impacts outweighs the benefits so, I would like to go against the possible
development
 of
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the
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high
school
.
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