Some countries achieve international success by building specialized facilities to train top athletes instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
Today many developed countries giving bias to train top athletes by provide them
specialized
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with specialized
structure
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structures
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of implement
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implementing
the
public purpose. Correct article usage
apply
Although
this
trend bringing to countries several benefits, I strongly believe this
tendency is a negative development
On the one hand, it understandable why government
give a priority to elite athletes due to they can make good results for their country. Indeed, Add an article
the trainer
a trainer
trainer
can take many high prizes and abundant medals in international sports events, like Fix the agreement mistake
trainers
euro
, world cup or Olympics... Thereby, it can put their flags on maps, by improving national brandings, it can exert positives impact on these countries especially economics and tourism. Correct article usage
the euro
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, government
believe that sponsor a mass of money to building Add an article
the government
trainings
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training
pieces of training
center
to providing athletes Change the spelling
centre
the
best condition to practice.
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with the
On the other hand
, government
can encounter more risk of people’s health triggered by negligence about providing social basic equipment. Providing more public facilities for dwellers is a good way to reduce the burden on health care. Specifically, when citizens are encouraged to take exercise, they can tackle the risk of different common diseases and save Add an article
the government
a
huge money spent on Remove the article
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medical
public for Add an article
the medical
government
. Add an article
the government
Secondly
, when a person has ambition
to be a professional athlete they required to a good condition and environment to striving for their dream and Change the article
the ambition
may be
they will become an excellent athlete, gain main prizes for Correct your spelling
maybe
country
in the future. If Add an article
the country
government
only focused on building specialized facilities to train top Add an article
the government
athlete
they might ignore the Fix the agreement mistake
athletes
next
generations. If young people not
have a carefully sponsor sports platform of Change the verb form
do not
did not
country
will be posed a threat.
In conclusion, while spending state budget to enhance special facilities to achieve global Add an article
the country
sport
metals is necessary, it is pivotal for Change the noun form
sports
government
to build public
structure for residents for social long-term benefits.Add an article
a public
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