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The best way to solve the traffic congestion in city is to provide free public transport for 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many
people
 believe that the most effective way to tackle traffic congestion in cities is to supply free public
transport
 whenever
people
itneed
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need
in need
. In my perspective,
this
 solution has more drawbacks
although
 free public
transport
 is a great idea. On the one hand, it is obvious that public transportations play a fundamental role in reducing the number of vehicles which are used at the same time.
As a result
, public
transport
 is free of charge, which is attributed to the fact that it will positively benefit many
people
.
Therefore
, few
people
 will extremely illuminate their personal vehicles.
For example
, in some modernization countries
such
 as Uk, Japan, Australia,... The number of city dwellers who use MRT and bus is the main way to work which result in collapsing the traffic congestion.
On the other hand
, when free public
transport
 becomes absolutely ubiquitous, it will be overcrowded with a dramatic climb in the number of users. Because of that, the city dwellers will have uncomfortable experiences.
In addition
,
this
 is a reasonable time that many bad
people
 can take advantage to commit a crime, so the user will pose a threat to the moral degeneracy of society.
For instance
, in VN public transportation, especially buses, the quality of internal furniture is really terrible and more crucial, some
people
 always make unethical activities that affect both the physical and mental of victims. In conclusion,
although
 free public
transport
 might seem to be a fantastic way to spur awareness of
people
 about solving traffic congestion, it is not a practical solution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • public transport
  • personal vehicles
  • infrastructure
  • service frequency
  • sustainable city planning
  • financial implications
  • congestion charges
  • promoting cycling or walking
  • ride-sharing apps
  • smart traffic management systems
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