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Essay topics: Providing a national system in a country where the unemployed receive a regular payment only encourages people not to seek work and puts an unreasonable strain on a countries financial resources. Discuss this statement and give your opinion.

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Receiving financial
support
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 from the
government
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 does encourage the community not to find
jobs
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 and which ultimately puts a burden on countries financial resources.
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 topic will be discussed in detail before coming to a conclusion.
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, providing financial backing as a pension to the unemployed population might change their thinking and they might feel like there is no obligation to work.
People
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 might feel demotivated,which will make them hopeless.
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, backing by the
government
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 financially will lead to less education and no future development of the country.
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, the Indian
government
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 provides financial
support
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 to unemployed or scheduled caste
people
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 and providing them
jobs
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 with higher salaries even though they are not educated properly.
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,
this
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 might lead to a financial crisis for the country. If the residents are not working it might lead to a bad future of a country. The
government
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 would have no choice but to distribute the amount to the unemployed
people
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. Unemployed
people
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 might put their life in jeopardy if they are not backed by the
government
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.
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, recently some cases have arisen due to covid, which caused many residents to lose their
jobs
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 and they are asking the
government
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 for financial
support
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. To conclude, I reckon that
government
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 should start providing some
jobs
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 to unemployed
people
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instead
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 of just supporting them financially.
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, if
people
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 are guaranteed financial
support
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 by the
government
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, they would no longer feel motivated to do their
jobs
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. They would file like let's continue
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 as the
government
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 is providing them financial
support
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 without any work.

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