Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are a lot of
advertisements
that can be seen on electronic devices. While a
part
of the
society
thinks that it definitely influences
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to buy things, another
part
of the
society
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those two sides and elaborate on why I agree with the latter
part
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society
. On the one hand, people believe that there are some spectators who tend to buy things because of
advertisements
. Most probably they should have
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in buying things in that way.
For instance
, when some advertiser wants to sell his
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instant noodle product, he tries to broadcast that there
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no
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preservatives added. But actually how it becomes chicken sapid without adding artificial
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?.
That is
why I agree with the
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we should not consider
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what the
advertisements
display.
On the other hand
, the other
part
of
society
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caring about what shows on electronic, mobile gadgets as they cannot be true always. All the
manufactures
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want to distribute their product among people despite there are some drawbacks
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consuming them.
For instance
, when they are introducing a hair
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, they tell that it is good for everybody who
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to turn grey hair into black. Even there was a death of a popular artist because of using hair dies, so many years ago.
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I encourage that we do not need to concern
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advertising unless there is
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proof. In conclusion,
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attention
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what the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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