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All large companies should provide sports facility and social gathering place for local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a lot of debate about who should pay for recreational
facilities
 in
communities
.
Although
 some people believe the business sector should provide these
facilities
, it is my opinion that
this
 is the role of
government
. Some people think that
companies
 should do more to support local
communities
. By providing sports and social
facilities
, it is argued that
companies
 can directly benefit
communities
. Sports
facilities
 will mean the local people are healthier and social
facilities
 will provide meeting places and cultural attractions which will enrich people’s lives.
However
, it is likely that
companies
 will see
this
 as a way to advertise and may build
facilities
 simply to improve the image of their brand. Personally, I believe that the
government
 should be responsible for providing recreational
facilities
. If they are provided by the
government
,
facilities
 can be
advertising free
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, aimed solely at improving life in the community. Taxes on businesses could be used to fund these
facilities
, but the building and maintenance should be carried out by the
government
. All local businesses could be taxed, which would be more effective than just a few
companies
 providing
facilities
.
This
 solution provides
facilities
 that will improve the community and are paid for by the business sector. In conclusion, it is important that public
facilities
 remain
advertising free
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 and so I believe it is better for the
government
 to provide recreational
facilities
 which could be funded by taxes on businesses. Before the
government
 decides what to build in each area, local
communities
 must be consulted to see what they really need and want.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Community welfare
  • Social cohesion
  • Brand image
  • Goodwill
  • Feasible
  • Financial constraints
  • Local government
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  • Social amenities
  • Foster
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