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All large companies should provide sports facility and social gathering place for local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a lot of debate about who should pay for recreational
facilities
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 in
communities
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.
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 some people believe the business sector should provide these
facilities
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, it is my opinion that
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 is the role of
government
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. Some people think that
companies
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 should do more to support local
communities
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. By providing sports and social
facilities
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, it is argued that
companies
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 can directly benefit
communities
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. Sports
facilities
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 will mean the local people are healthier and social
facilities
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 will provide meeting places and cultural attractions which will enrich people’s lives.
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, it is likely that
companies
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 will see
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 as a way to advertise and may build
facilities
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 simply to improve the image of their brand. Personally, I believe that the
government
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 should be responsible for providing recreational
facilities
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. If they are provided by the
government
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,
facilities
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 can be
advertising free
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, aimed solely at improving life in the community. Taxes on businesses could be used to fund these
facilities
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, but the building and maintenance should be carried out by the
government
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. All local businesses could be taxed, which would be more effective than just a few
companies
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 providing
facilities
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.
This
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 solution provides
facilities
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 that will improve the community and are paid for by the business sector. In conclusion, it is important that public
facilities
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 remain
advertising free
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 and so I believe it is better for the
government
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 to provide recreational
facilities
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 which could be funded by taxes on businesses. Before the
government
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 decides what to build in each area, local
communities
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 must be consulted to see what they really need and want.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Community welfare
  • Social cohesion
  • Brand image
  • Goodwill
  • Feasible
  • Financial constraints
  • Local government
  • Networking
  • Productive activities
  • Social amenities
  • Foster
  • Civic engagement
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