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Walking along any major street, one sees examples of pirated goods being sold openly in stalls and kiosks. Some people believe that people who sell these products should be prosecuted. To what extent do you agree with this?

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In
this
 day and age, we have seen uncopyrighted
products
 being sold in some shops, on the main street areas in some countries.
However
, there is a convincing argument that we should punish the
people
 who have sold that. In my personal opinion, I strongly agree that the benefits of selling these illegal
goods
 are eclipsed by their drawbacks.
This
 essay will examine both points of view. There is, undoubtedly, a major advantage to consider when looking at selling pirated
products
. Perhaps. the most striking benefit of
this
 is that it could provide more opportunities to access more knowledge and experiences for some poor
people
. Due to the fact that some copyrighted
goods
 are expensive, some
people
 don't have enough money to buy them.
For example
, some amateur artists, who want to improve their guitar skills, have tried to learn from the professionals in the video but they can not afford it.
As a result
 of
this
, these
people
 might have no chance to educate themselves.
Consequently
, those nations, which have faced
this
 problem, tend to be undeveloped countries, without quality workers. Despite there being major benefits of selling copyright protected materials without permission, some
people
 say that there are various reasons for arresting the sellers. A significant reason for
this
 is that it might steal inspiration and creativity from new entrepreneurs. In order to create new
products
, they need to use a lot of energy, money and knowledge. Because of
this
,
people
 need to earn something back from what they have invested in. If someone stole their idea and sold it, They might not be willing to produce any
goods
 to the market.
As a result
, a number of good quality
products
 will not be built and sold.
Therefore
, we have to use old technology, with the inconvenience. Another drawback to consider is many businesses will be close. Because nobody buys legal
products
, many companies will be in debt.
Consequently
, the employment rates could drop, leading to a marked decrease in the GDP of a whole country. In conclusion, If the governments imposed a law to control how
public
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 sell copyrighted
goods
 strictly, the problem would be solved.
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