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Many small, local shops are closing as they are unable to compete with large supermarkets in the area. How does this affect local communities? How could this situation be improved?

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Many small local
shops
 have been closed in recent years because customers prefer to do their shopping in large shopping centres or malls. In my opinion,
this
 is a negative development as losing local
shops
 in
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the neighbourhood
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neighbourhood
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neighbourhoods
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 can impact the local
community
 and
also
 unnecessary traffic
congestion
 can happen in city area if everyone starts to do shopping in large shopping centres. Small
shops
 in our
neighbourhood
 help the local
community
 in several ways. Unlike the
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supermarket
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super market
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supermarket
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 chains, these local shop owners know each and everyone in the
neighbourhood
.
Also
,
people
 in
local
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the local
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community
 trust these small businesses as
all
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they all
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 lives in
same
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the same
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neighbourhood
. So, there is
very
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 low chance for customers to get cheated by business owners.
In addition
 to that, there are a lot of families purchasing their daily essential goods from local
shops
 without paying money immediately and pay them mostly at the end of the month. All of these are possible only in local
shops
.
On the other hand
, the trend of
people
 going to buy their all essential goods from a large shopping centre will increase traffic
congestion
 in
city
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the city
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 side.
Although
shopping
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a shopping
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 centre appears as a convenient place to buy all essential goods at one place, it may create unnecessary
congestion
 if
people
 start to go and buy one or two items which can be easily bought from local
shops
. In conclusion, local
shops
 help a lot to
local
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the local
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community
 and there is a good understanding and trust between
people
 in
local
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the local
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community
 and the local business owners so there is
a
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less chance for cheating.
Also
, if local
shops
 disappear, these large shopping centres can create unnecessary traffic
congestion
 in
city
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the city
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area
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areas
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.
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