Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?
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preponderant
people
are favouring that, Government should invest their money
in other things rather than arts
. Firstly
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govenment
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the govenment
instituion
for their students. Correct your spelling
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institutions
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, people
are died becuase
of traffic and no rules and regulation for the road. Government should spend Correct your spelling
because
money
to fixing traffic signals, construct proper roads, one traffic police are available on every four roads and many more. Last
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medicial
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middle class
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people
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development
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Moreover
, Arts
are consistent sources of economic growth during both good and difficult economic times.
In conclusion, Al in all, to amalgamates all the points discussed above, it can be recapituated
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