Too much money is spent on repairing old buildings instead of constructing new ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent days ,folk have a tendency to find innovative ideas on constructing homes.
Therefore
,a fair amount of people believe that people would rather modify buildings than build new apartments.I partially agree with
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statement the reasons I will explain in the forthcoming paragraphs. On the one hand,due to various reasons repairing of old buildings have several advantages.
Firstly
,many ancient buildings have
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in a traditional manner and the
equipments
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,which have
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construct homes are costly so that again build
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apartment would lead to
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double expenditure than the previous one.For evidence,materials cost have tremendously increased
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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