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“The internet never will replace traditional course books in school”. How far do you agree with this prediction?

#“the #internet #course #books #school” #prediction
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These days a lot of
books
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 are published in two tools, which are paper and the
internet
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. Despite, reading
books
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 on the
internet
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 is becoming popular, for school-aged children, conventional paper-based
books
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 may be more suitable than web-based. Staring a
screen
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 for long hours isn’t good for their eyes and general wellbeing.
First
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 and foremost, paper-based textbooks give us more real imagination and feeling because the human brain responds a variety of actions to real paper-based statements compared to read texts on the
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.
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, there is an enormous difference between abstract and real paper-based
books
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 for gaining knowledge.
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, in my case, I can’t read a long article or news on the
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 due to the fact that my attention isn’t fully concentrated on the
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 environment.
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, we access the
internet
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 through cell phones or computers,
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 we have to look at a blue lighted
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 in order to catch up the data or news. Staring a display for long hours affects our brain and eyes. Some studies have mentioned about negative influences of the blue-lighted
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 on our health and brain
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 as it causes sleep deprivation and drops our quality of ability to see. So, we should select a safer mode for our physic rather than a harmful option for learning. Having considered the potential issues, I’m not in favour of getting knowledge through the
internet
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 because of possible the harmful effect caused by a
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 and the risk to students’ health. It seems that reading mini-articles and news on the
internet
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 is more suitable for adults.
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