Immigrants suffer discrimination at work. Talk about them and give your opinion on how to change this scenario.

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One of the highly controversial issues today relates to inequality. Some immigration peoples get some stress to work because of discrimination. In

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essay, I will explain the reasons and suggest my ideas

how

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to improve

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them

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. There are several reasons why immigrants

are not satisfy

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about

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work. It is clear that they do not get their full reliability.

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is because they are not

native

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a native

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speaker

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. Native people concern about their communication

skill

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. If people from others can speak

certain

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the certain

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language fluently,

however

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they are not able to get

important

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job in the company.

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, someone

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bullying them.

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, native one give them too much

hard

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task

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for them or they use

slangs

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to blame them.

, persons who are immigrants might not have good friends nearby them. As the result, they could not release a lot of stress and they feel miserable to go to

workplace

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the workplace

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On the other hand

, these problems have crucial solutions. There is no doubt that native one should have

kindness

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feeling

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feelings

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. If they can not fluent communication, it is

normal

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thing because they are originally not

same

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culture to grow up. Their expression, feeling, and custom are not equal.

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, the company ought to set up the systems.

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, in Japan, all companies install call

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which

remove

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the stress or

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some questions for

foreigner

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foreigners

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in many languages. As for

this

person

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a person

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from overseas can do their job convenient. To sum up, there are the reasons why immigrants concern about their work because

the

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issues of credibility and blaming foreign people. Whereas, workers have a kind mindset and make a consultation system may deal with each

matters

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Immigrants suffer discrimination at work. Talk about them and give your opinion on how to change this scenario.

In some cities, public parks and open spaces are being changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetables. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people prefer to go to health clubs and gyms for health care, some say the walking and climbing stairs are more effective. Discuss both vies and give your opinion.

Some argue that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should perform in the place where they accomplished their training, while others think that they should be allowed to work freely where they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

should the governments make decisions about peoples lifestyle , or should people make their own decisions?What is your Opinion?

Some people think that the increase in international travel has a negative impact on the environment and should be restricted. To what extent you agree or disagree?