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Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the countryside. Others believe that there are health benefits of living in cities. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #lifestyle #countryside #health #cities
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 LIFESTYLE CAN BRING HEALTHY
LIFE
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HOWEVER
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, IT IS BELIEVED BY FEW FOLKS THAT
VILLAGE
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 LOCALITY CAN ASSISTANCE TO MAINTAIN FIT BODY. WHEREAS, OTHER PARTS OF SOCIETY FEEL THAT
PEOPLE
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 OF URBAN AREAS CAN LIVE PHYSICALLY FIT RATHER THAN RURAL. WHILE THESE BOTH POINTS CAN EXPLAIN IN THE SUBSEQUENT PARAGRAPHS ALONG WITH MY VIEWPOINT. TO COMMENCE WITH, THE LACK OF AMENINTES PREDOMINANT REASON IS THAT
VILLAGE
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 FOLKS ARE MORE HEALTHY .BECAUSE THE MOST OF WORK DONE BY PHYSICALLY. OWING TO
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, THEY DO NOT NEED TO DO EXTRA WORKOUTS LIKE DEVELOPED CITY
PEOPLE
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 AS A CONSEQUENCE THEY LIVE HEALTHY
LIFE
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FURTHERMORE
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, THE MAJORITY OF
VILLAGE
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PEOPLE
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 ARE FARMERS DUE TO
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, THEY GREW FRESH FRUIT AND VEGETABLES FOR A HEALTHY BODY, WHILE CITY
PEOPLE
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 EAT FAST FOOD WHICH BRINGS LOTS OF DISEASES.
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, IT WAS PUBLISHED BY OXFORD UNIVERSITY THAT AROUND 76% OF THE
PEOPLE
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 DID NOT ENCOUNTER ANY
HEALTH
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 HASSLE WHO SPENT THEIR
LIFE
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 IN UNDERDEVELOPING AREA. ON THE OTHER SIDE,
PEOPLE
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 WHO BELIEVE THAT CITY
LIFE
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 IS MORE HEALTHY BECAUSE
PEOPLE
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 CAN GET EVERY TYPE OF
FACILITIES
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 RELATED TO
HEALTH
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SUCH
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 AS ADVANCED HOSPITALS, EXPERTS
HEALTH
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 COACHES, AND
FITNESS
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 CENTERS THAT CAN AIDFUL FOR KEEPING FIT BODY.
IN ADDITION
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 TO
THIS
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, IF ANY PERSON HAVE ANY
HEALTH
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 ISSUES
THEN
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 THEY CAN CONNECT WITH DOCTORS AND CURE THEIR
HEALTH
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 PROBLEMS. TO EPITOMIZE, IF ANY PERSON WANT TO DO ANY SURGERY RELATED TO FAT
THEN
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 THEY NEED TO GO TO
CITIES
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 SINCE THESE
FACILITIES
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 ARE ONLY AVAILABLE IN
CITIES
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. IN METRO
CITIES
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PEOPLE
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 NOT ONLY GET HEATH CENTERS
FACILITIES
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 BUT
ALSO
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FITNESS
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 EXPERTS. TO CONCLUDE,
ALTHOUGH
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CITIES
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 GIVE
FACILITIES
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 TO
FITNESS
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 LOVER
PEOPLE
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 , RURAL
PEOPLE
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 GET FRESH VEGETABLES AND FRUITS WHICH MAKES MORE HEALTHY. ACCORDING TO MY PERSPECTIVE,
VILLAGE
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LIFE
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 IS BETTER DUE TO THE FACT OF HEALTHY ENVIRONMENT
THAT IS
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 A KEY OF
FITNESS
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