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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree of disagree with this opinion?

#people #music #cultures #ages
It is true that
music
 plays various plays in our life. Some
people
 say that
music
 can connect different cultures and ages
people
. I agree with
this
 view but
somtimes
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sometimes
 the difference between
age
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ages
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 is hard to connect
people
 together. On the one hand, the
favorite
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music
 genres depend on each generation, so
this
 often causes controversy.
For example
, in Viet Nam, most
of
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adults
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the adults
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 tend to listen to bolero, folk
music
 or cairojess. While
teenager
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teenagers
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like
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 listening to other
music
 genres
such
 as pop, rap,
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Therefore
,
somtimes
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sometimes
 there are some arguments between the generation because of
music
 styles.
On the other hand
, despite the aforementioned disadvantage, I would contend that
music
 is a good method to bring
people
 of different
culures
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cultures
 and ages together.
People
 who have the same
music
 style can play and sing together.
For example
, there
are
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 more and more
music
club
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clubs
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 for all ages and cultures in Viet Nam,
therefore
people
 can share and learn many things.
Furthermore
, regardless of age, we can enjoy a memorable melody or a beautiful singing voice, and some songs seem to have the same effect on all of us.
This
 would explain why competitions of
music
 like ‘The Voice’, ‘
Giong
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Going
 ca
nhi’
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this
,...are more and more popular shows. In conclusion,
athough
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although
 there is
difference
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the difference
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about
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 the
music
 style between
generation
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generations
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,
music
 is a good way to build good relationships between all
people
 in the world without discrimination of age and culture.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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