These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children's behavior. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays the world is developing day by day . there is an increasing amount of
violence
broadcasted on television these days.which is having a negative effect on
children
's
attitudes
.as
children
are very good learners, they are
adapt
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to what they see immediately. when they are watching destruction and
violence
on the screen they are learning from it very rapidly which reflects in their behaviour.
Therefore
, I completely agree with the
statment
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statement
that watching
violence
on television has a bad impact on
children
's behaviour. The environment of the house is the biggest impact of the place for learning positive
attitudes
for
children
.
for instance
,
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if they see parents or siblings are fighting or blaming for each
others
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other's
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children
would learn from their parent's behaviours. their parent's characters are badly influenced for
children
's life .home is the place
children
could learn positive
attitudes
and good education background. when the parents behave positive
attitudes
in front of
children
they are never adapting negative behaviours.
On the other hand
,In recent
Tv
programmes are the biggest learning source for
children
when they telecasted bad content on
tv
channels definitely
children
are getting things from it.
tv
programmes could do turn
children
for good or bad behaviours.
For instance
,nowadays
TV
shows and cartoons
contented
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with
violence
and fighting scenes.before one week in Sri Lanka one of the
tv
channel shows ,one school child was beaten his colleague because that child took his lunch box in the canteen .they can nicely solve
this
trouble through talking with each
others
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other
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.But nowadays
children
are fighting for every matter. these
attitudes
they are taking from
TV
shows and fighting included cartoons . In conclusion ,negative changes in
children
's
attitudes
are due to the increasing amount of shows on
televisions
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television
show examples
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that
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reflects what they see on
tv
.the government and parents should need to decreased
this
changing
behavior
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behaviour
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to the positive side .
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