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Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city while others think that bicycle is better. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion

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In modern life,
people
 have made a lot of developments on vehicles making it become more in cities, especially
cars
 and bicycles. Some
people
 think that
cars
 are the best way to travel in a city. Meanwhile, others think that bicycle is better. In my point of view, both types of transport have their own advantages and drawbacks and I treat both
cars
 and bicycles equally.
To begin
 with,
cars
 have become very
cars
 common in cities.
People
 use
cars
 to travel as it is very fast and have the capacity to carry many
people
 as well as items at a time.
Moreover
,
cars
also
 come with amazing features
such
 as an air-conditioner, which makes them cool in the summer and warm in the winter.
However
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 using
cars
 can be inconvenient sometimes as there are lots of alleys in the city and limited parking places.
On the other hand
, cycling is
also
 a citizen's favourite in most cities. Since using bicycle don't require any parking lot or produce any exhausting fumes, the bicycle becomes so convenient and environmental friendly in the city.
However
, cycling is not a suitable method for long trips as it needs a lot of effort to travel. Taking everything into conclusion,
cars
 and bicycles have their own benefits and drawbacks.
Therefore
,
people
 should consider carefully the vehicle when travelling to places and use them for suitable purposes.
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