In many countries, international tourism has become an important source of income. However, it also has negative effects. Do the benefits of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

International
tourism
has been generating a major portion of the revenue in most of the countries.Collectively, it has both advantages and disadvantages that
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various aspects
in
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community
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. One key negative point is the social issues created by
tourism
.In a country like Sri Lanka where
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prostitution and drugs are legally prohibited,
tourism
has made plenty of opportunities to grow these.Another disadvantage is
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environmental pollution.Most of the natural places have been destroying due to
massive
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number of visitors.
Also
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tourism
is not a stable income.
This
has been clearly shown during the
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on going
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Covid pandemic situation.Most of the sectors related
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are being collapsed. When considering the positive factors,
firstly
this
brings foreign exchanges and investments to the country.In Sri Lanka,the contribution of
tourism
to its economy is around 20%,which is a remarkably high value.
Secondly
,there are
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amount of jobs created in
tourism
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sector.Being an island,
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of the beach community is engaging in
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professions.
However
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international
tourism
is not the only cause for prostitution and drugs in Sri Lanka.Again there
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enough evidence to prove that environmental pollution is mainly done by local visitors,not the tourists.Without
tourism
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amount of direct and indirect jobs will be losen. That will eventually create another set of economical social problems as well.
Hence
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there are more positive
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contributions
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than the negative in
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international
tourism
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Revenue
  • Accommodation
  • Cultural exchange
  • Infrastructure
  • Pollution
  • Erosion
  • Overcrowding
  • Economic dependency
  • Global events
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Mutual understanding
  • Strain on natural resources
  • Foot traffic
  • Local traditions and customs
  • Cultural awareness
  • Vulnerable
  • Pandemics
  • Political instability
  • Residue
  • Host country
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